Jase

By Jase Davis
 * __ Stop [[image:http://www.zakopane-life.com/media/pics/tatra-mountains-zakopane.jpg align="right"]] __**

Stillness left from the sky, Silence has left Relaxing mountains were torn by a sudden tremor The goodness broken, slammed without warning Craggy screams flew at me Beauty was unaware of the warning Minutes passed from me then, Stop. Refocus the silence, and Realize flashes of noise before my ears Every town has been destructive Now retreat the roads, then Slam the brakes on cities Shake me from my dream, and Return the rain and beauty.

"Beauty was unaware of the warning"

Beauty  cannot have a sense of danger or not. By using personification in this I am able to emphasize how I was suddenly shaken. This also has to do with the tone of the poem. I tried to get the poem to be about over development and this adds to that because the beauty would not be taken away by buildings.

"Stop."

This line break is firstly unusually punctuated. Before that line I had not used a single period. While now there is a short line with a period followed by a line break. I wanted the reader to physically stop when they were reading this. It is important for them to reflect on what was said before in destroying beauty and for them to now realize what to do to bring it back.



** Ode to the Soldier ** ** By Jase Davis **

Take that flag further to the end of the night. Put it on your shoulder and bring it back For you cannot leave this place without a fight.

For in the end you will be all right, As the others scream attack! Attack! Take that flag further to the end of the night.

You have carried it to this height, Push it further through the shadowy black For you cannot leave this place without a fight.

Bring it over the mountains to daylight, Do not stop until the sun overcomes the mountain’s cracks Take that flag further to the end of the night.

You have seen the end, clear and bright Coming to you against the stark unknowing black For you cannot leave this place without a fight.

Tired, worn, and beaten continue upright Put them on your shoulder and bring them back Take that flag further to the end of the night For you cannot leave this place without a fight.

"Push it further through the shadowy black"

I used imagery to emphasize continuing onwards. Beforehand I had said to keep going but now I put an image to that idea. The idea of the soldier having to trudge out of the darkness and into the sunlight (that being his or her goal.) The reader can now imagine themselves climbing over the mountain and seeing the same light as the soldier.

"Do not stop until the sun overcomes the mountain’s cracks"

By using a compressed conflict at this point it adds more depth to the poem. The extra describing word brings more description and realism to the stanza. That is though the turnaround point for the story. It ends being about the act of continuing on and becomes the reason that the soldier should carry on. 

FOR LOVE
BY ROBERT CREELEY

for Bobbie

Yesterday I wanted to speak of it, that sense above the others to me important because all

that I know derives from what it teaches me. Today, what is it that is finally so helpless,

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">different, despairs of its own <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">statement, wants to <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">turn away, endlessly <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">to turn away.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;"> <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">If the moon did not ... <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">no, if you did not <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">I wouldn’t either, but <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">what would I not

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">do, what prevention, what <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">thing so quickly stopped. <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">That is love yesterday <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">or tomorrow, not

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">now. Can I eat <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">what you give me. I <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">have not earned it. Must <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">I think of everything

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">as earned. Now love also <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">becomes a reward so <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">remote from me I have <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">only made it with my mind.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">Here is tedium, <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">despair, a painful <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif;">sense of isolation and <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">whimsical if pompous

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">self-regard. But that image <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">is only of the mind’s <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">vague structure, vague to me <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">because it is my own.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">Love, what do I think <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">to say. I cannot say it. <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">What have you become to ask, <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">what have I made you into,

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">companion, good company, <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">crossed legs with skirt, or <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">soft body under <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">the bones of the bed.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">Nothing says anything <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">but that which it wishes <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">would come true, fears <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">what else might happen in

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">some other place, some <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">other time not this one. <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">A voice in my place, an <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">echo of that only in yours.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">Let me stumble into <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">not the confession but <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">the obsession I begin with <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">now. For you

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">also (also) <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">some time beyond place, or <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">place beyond time, no <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">mind left to

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">say anything at all, <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">that face gone, now. <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">Into the company of love <span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">it all returns.

<span style="font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; padding-left: 1em; text-indent: -1em;">A recitation of For Love: []